Well if you don't want anyone's opinion on the track you probably shouldn't post it here, or write it like that in your top post.
I personally take critics as inspiration, and try to give it in the same sense. I don't pretend to know the perfect answer to everything, i just give my very personal feelings about a track here. I thought this is what this forum was for. At least everybody else keeps complaining they don't get enough feedback. ..
Sorry if I couldn't be any help, so I don't try to be anymore. And as I said I only gave very detailed feedback because I sensed a lot in the first version, and really liked it a lot, and was rather dissappointed by the second one.
Anyway, good luck with your track!
"In my life I widened a lot of holes!" (Jeff Milligan, talking about slipmats)